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Old 09-22-2004, 07:01 PM   #3
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Hi Amy,
I like this painting. You have an unforced style that I find inviting, and I like your painterly brushwork on the clothing. You may be ready to learn, but I don't know that I have anything very useful to teach you. I'll toss in a few comments for what they're worth.

Avery looks a little older in the painting than in the photo; maybe the face proportions (forehead versus lower face) are a little more mature in the painting. It looks like you've changed the lighting on the face from being brightest on the forehead in the reference photo to being brightest on the cheek and upper lip in the painting. This is difficult to invent, as I've learned from sad experience. It's better to photograph the reference with the desired lighting from the beginning. There is a tangency where her pigtail on our right ends even with her collar, it might read a little easier if it extended a little past, as it seems to in the reference. The top of her head might come a little too close to the edge when the painting is framed.
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