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Old 11-03-2004, 01:41 PM   #5
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I love the sensitive way you painted her head; very well done, especially considering it's angle. I understand what you're trying to do by integrating a more painterly background but it's just not working for me here.

To me, the vertical and horizontal strokes are juxtaposed in a way that creates a very static, almost vise-like, structure surrounding the girl. I think the arbitrary placement of the bright reds and yellows bring the background forward and flatten the space. Also, to my eye, the background color doesn't seem to relate to the colors in the girl.

The darks around her head and the lights around her legs also have a flattening effect. Every thing is vying for my attention. Some things needs to be subservient in order for one thing to be dominant. If there were more contrast in the foreground and less in the background you would create more illusionistic space. I am also confused by the stool. Is her foot actually on it or suspended in the air in front of it?

The idea that artists are supposed lash out and throw paint around is a modernistic myth. Sargent who is known for the apparent freshness of his paint application was very controlled and calculating in creating the appearance of spontaneity . He was documented by his sitters as taking up to 80 sittings to complete one portrait. Hardly lashing, I'd say.

I think you're one of the most talented people on this forum. I believe you have tremendous potential but for whatever reason you seem to go against your strengths. Just sayin'!
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