Hi Janet, I think we are piling up on you.
Try this: in Photoshop, make a greyscale of your photo, then as you paint, shoot a greyscale of your painting. You'll be able to see values of colors much better as they relate to the grays of a value scale. I think that confusing color with value is the main problem with this painting, along with hard edges.
Also, try to take photos where the lights are not blown out so much as you have here. It will make finding form a lot easier. I personally wouldn't try to work from this photo. Be picky, picky, picky.
You have really nice painterly qualities, don't stop posting.
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