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Carolyn Bannister · 05-23-2005, 05:08 PM

Allan,

I couldn't agree more

To me it looks childish and amateurish

I've actually put it away in and started on a new one but now you've got me thinking about it again.

I thought about cropping it and just keeping the head and shoulders but I should rise to the challenge and figure out a way to make it work, I really would like to keep the depth to the room.

How about a curtain from ceiling to floor and make the whole of the back of the room very dark?

Maybe that's what I liked about the ref in the first place.

Thanks for taking the time to critique, I really do value your input.

Mike McCarty · 05-23-2005, 07:58 PM

I think this composition would be best suited to a full completion of the background.

When I first saw your reference I thought that it was the vertical wall segments, with their variations in value, that connected the foreground to the background. I think you could have more success by re-visiting your reference and covering the entire paper.

This is worth taking further, I think.

Carolyn Bannister · 05-25-2005, 05:13 AM

Not the best photo, it's blowing a gale outside, it was a struggle sticking it to the shutters (thats a professional photography term

)

For some reason resizing it has made the table look a bit bent, but I think I've got away with it for real.

Is it a

or a

this time, if its a no I'm going to crop it

ps. Why do I feel just like I did in school when I always got ' could do better' on my reports.

Allan Rahbek · 05-25-2005, 06:06 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Carolyn Bannister

Is it a

or a

this time, if its a no I'm going to crop it

Please don

Carolyn Bannister · 05-25-2005, 07:08 AM

Phew, breathes a sigh of relief!!

Allan,

Tusinde tak, your

means a lot to me, I really admire your work. It was Mikes helpful comments about the vertical lines that made me realise what I had seen in the original ref.

I think I will stick to using my own ref's in future, they make much more sense to me.

By the way Demark is a beautiful place we lived in Dragor and Kobenhavn for a while, I really enjoyed it!

Mike McCarty · 05-25-2005, 08:44 AM

I would call this a success, I would not crop it.

Garth Herrick · 05-29-2005, 02:40 AM

I think this is a resounding success Carolyn! Your finished interpretation is stupendously good. Bravo!

Garth

Ilaria Rosselli Del Turco · 05-29-2005, 05:35 PM

Carolyn, maybe you would be interested in taking a look at this painting, which won the BP portrait award two years ago.
http://www.npg.org.uk/live/prelbpportraitwinner.asp
Many many compliments for this very accomplished piece
Ilaria

Carolyn Bannister · 06-17-2005, 08:41 AM

Sorry to have not responded sooner , but I have just spent 10 wonderful days touring Italy, I am completely renaissanced out

But got to see a Lucian Freud exhibition to even things out, really like his work!

Illaria,

Thankyou for the compliment, and also the link, I really like the painting, I actually have been experimenting with some very close cropping for another piece I have in mind so it is very useful. I like her other work as well, seems she likes older faces also.

By the way Florence has to be my favourtie city from the ones I visited, caught a glimpse of the Plazzo or was it Piazza Rosselli Del Turco

Garth,

Thankyou also for the compliment, I have to say thankyou again to Mike and Allan for their advice and hope they'll do the same next time

Carolyn

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Ilaria Rosselli Del Turco · 06-17-2005, 08:52 AM

It is palazzo, and has been in the family since a few centuries, but my dad now lives upstairs in the attic, trying to keep it all together (we are the typical old family now impoverished)
Anyway, if you hop on this side of the Channel, BP portrait award is on at the National Gallery, interesting exhibition.
Ilaria