Book cover "Master & Disciple"

[Chris Saper]

Hi Trisha,

There are a couple of things I notice: the master's cheekbone on our left, I think needs an entire value shift where the front of the face turns to become the side of the face. That plane change is not really vertical, it moves forward as it moves down the face.

I also think that you might integrate both figures' hairlines with the skin on the forehead/side of the face.The part in the disciple's hair might use some value shifts in order to make it appear more dimensional.

Trisha, check the drawing on the disciple's head. My impression is that there's not enough skull above the eyes.

Where will the title go?

[Claudemir Bonfim]

That's much better now, I think Chris has mentioned everything I would.
Fine job.

[Tricia Migdoll]

Thank you very much. This is wonderful feedback to work from.

Chris, the title will go above & beyond the painting's edge.

[Carol Norton]

Tricia, this is such an interesting painting that I must confess some curious ignorance here. I am fascinated to learn what the "Master" is a master of. Is this a Christian "master" as in Christ? You used the word "sadra". Is this a yoga or Hindu master or guru? A master of the guitar? Please quench my curiosity.

I may not sleep tonight should I not soon learn the answer.

Sleepless in Sun Lakes,
Carol Norton

[Steven Sweeney]

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[Tricia Migdoll]

Thanks Steven.

I think my problem was in working from a B&W photo - for both men, and trying to wing a match for the light source using the forward man as the reference.
( not very clever am I !)
I did check my values by posterizing in Photoshop, but perhaps the camera lied in the original photo. The iris of the second man was shown that way in the photo. I knew it was strange wen painting it, but i didn't want to change the expression that the eye was giving us.

Never mind. I will try & do better next time.
Thank you all for taking the time to point out my errors here.
This is how i learn best.